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Module A Sample Essay

Significant human issues and values resonate in pairs of texts despite shifting contexts

The critical concerns of humanity transcend context, through synergism of two texts we can glean the ways in which these issues resonate in time. The 1800s Gothic and science-fiction novel “Frankenstein” by Mary Shelley was the pioneer of it is genre, the story centres on an ambitious scientist and the tragedy that befalls him and his creation (don’t use it’s unless you are substituting ‘it is’) exploring issues of the morality of science, the role of women and the influence of religion. The 1980s cyberpunk film, “Blade Runner”, directed by Ridley Scott, was produced (is set) in a post-modern world which sees the encroaching success of technology on society, 2nd (second) wave feminism and increasing religious secularity. The central scientific, social and religious concerns which drive the Western world resonate within both texts.

Science and technology has been a valuable driving force for the progression of humanity. The exploration of nature and it’s (its) sciences, as encouraged in the 1800s Unitarian world could have negative consequences, as warned by “Frankenstein”. The myth of Prometheus is an extended metaphor within the story, as Victor ,the ambitious scientist, strives to acquire the gift of life through science to benefit humanity and metaphorically “banish disease from the human frame”. The megalomania of Victor is matched by Tyrell in “Blade Runner”, who runs a corporation that produces human “replicants” which are designed to be ironically, “more human than human” ,with greater strength and intellect, paralleling the value of a ‘better humanity through science’ despite different contexts. Concern for the consequence of the peruse of science (scientific advancement?)</span) has also been (is) a significant human issue, as Victor’s growing obsession with his project, exemplified by the repetition in “one thought, one conception, one purpose”, isolates him from reality. The juxtaposition in his reaction “it became a thing such as even Dante could not have conceived” when the monster is conceived, to his initial joy, reveals his failure to anticipate the consequence of his action. The aggressive tone of “I want more life, f*cker!” when the replicant, Roy, confronts Tyrell about his shorter programmed life-span, shows Tyrells parallel failure in taking responsibility for his scientific creations. Although science and technology could conceivably benefit humanity, issues of responsibility and morality must be addressed.

(Some good analysis, though you have two ideas here – how science advances and the consequences of it. What are the messages which are represented through these quotes? What does, for instance, “I want more life” instil in the audience? What kind of human issue is it? How can it be paired with perhaps the monster’s will for a normal life in Frankenstein?)

The perceived roles of different groups of individuals has been a central issue to the functioning of society, having been subverted and reaffirmed through time and contexts. The presentation of women in “Frankenstein” is reflective of the traditional values they are expected to imbue. The simile “…as a fair exotic is sheltered by the gardener(What is this comparing to in the text? We only have half a simile here) to describe Victor’s mother as treated by his father is evident of the patriarchal social value of the ownership and protection of women. This value is contested in “Blade Runner” with the replicant, Pris’s, isolation when she enters ers the movie, symbolic of the value of independence of women in the context of post-modern 2nd wave feminism. The simile that Elizabeth “shone like a shrine-dedicated lamp” in Victor’s home connotes the domestic dedication of women that was expected in the 1800s. Pris however, juxtaposes this value by not belonging to a home, instead freely moving about in the city. The courtesy traditionally expected of women is represented in the metaphor that Elizabeth“veiled her grief and stove to act the comforter”, after Victor’s mother’s death. The intimidating black-and white costuming of Pris is subversive of the traditionally docile associations with women, the hovering shadow from the lighting signifying her as a potential threat. The perceived role of women and the values they represent has been a central issue in both texts, from the perspectives of both the traditional and 2nd wave feminism.

(Some good points but you jump back and forth a bit too much, especially in the last half of the paragraph. You need to make a link to how they are values which resonate ‘in pairs’ despite how they are represented. Every text represents women and men, that is just how they are. I think you also need to make a clearer definition about traditional and second wave feminist values, and make a critical assessment of their importance to both texts)

Christianity has been a consistent force in influencing societal values in the western world . The changing perception of Christianity in the Unitarian world of the 1800s saw a paradigmatic shift in values, from the worship of god (God) in church to nature. The romantic genre played a significant role in the perception as in Frankenstein, the religious awe of nature is evident in Victor’s metaphorical desire  for “the secrets of heaven and earth” through the study of natural science. In religions (religious) thought, the creation of life was one of gods (God’s) greatest achievement, Victors encroachment on this power was regarded as a blasphamy,  as metaphorically “the cup of life was poisoned forever”. “Frankenstein” serves as a warning to humanity to not easily tinker with God’s powers, the consequence that befalls Victor through his failure to take responsibility for his creation  is exemplified by the eye motif which signifies his guilt. In religious thought, eyes are the windows to the soul, in close up of eyes in the “Voight-Kampff” test for replicants reinforce their importance. Frankenstein’s creation also compares himself to Satan in  the religious metaphor, “I ought to be thy Adam, but I am rather the fallen angel”, through Victor’s ignorance of the powers of god, (God) he has created a monster. The value of life in religious thought has been a central concern to religion throughout the various contexts of text.

(A bit confusing. You need to stop jumping back and forth between texts and make a statement about how the representation of Christianity is linked in both texts, not just how it is represented. You also jump between ‘religious’ and ‘Christian’ – they aren’t the same thing and it further confuses your argument.)

Pervasive human concerns of responsibility for science, the role of women and the influence of religion remains significant despite shifting context. “Frankenstein” and “Blade Runner” both express concern for these issues and the values they dictate in their respective societies of 1800s romanticism and the post-modernism of 1980s. Through synergism of two texts we can compare how different societies  represent and respond to these concerns.

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Some good examples and details about the representations of values in both texts. Some good arguments that are relevant to both texts.

You jump back and forth between the texts a lot and this weakens your argument. In many cases I have to re-read a sentence to know what you are referring to. You have listed many examples, but you need to discuss what they mean and how they ‘resonate’ as suggested in the question. You need to mention who they resonate with – that is – us as an audience. Edit your work!

Try to stick to the same keywords that you use in your topic sentence. It might sound like you are repeating yourself but it does make what you write clearer.

A good effort but it does need a bit of a proofread. You do need to stop jumping back and forth between texts and make a clearer connection between your quotes (and ideas) and how they resonate with values in an audience.

 

 

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